Life's steepest surfaces,
Rise from the murky depths,
Build
Slowly
To form impenetrable walls.
Look to me,
As I reach for the blue sky,
And brave these cliffs,
Unfolding before us.
As graceful as a primate,
Fingers nimble,
Over sharp rocks.
I look to you,
While ascending.
Follow me.
Submitted to One Stop Poetry's One Shot Wednesday - week 29
9 comments:
Love the sharpness of the form. "follow me" brilliant.
Really nice...love it the title and the ascending...upward...a positive trust reaching for something beautiful...bkm
A great reach
powerful - I feel suspended
I love the message.
We look to others to support us when we are coming down but let's not forget those who were there while we were going up.
I really like this, it's very strong and beautiful.
Has a dreamy feel that I adore Carmella, it's an amazing poem and a powerful message. Your work is beautiful hun, truly x
Great One Shot. I can feel the ascent.
I loved the opening
"Life's steepest surfaces,Rise from the murky depths" it painted an awesome picture for me. The entire poem was nice and showed so much to be positive about. Thank you for sharing this piece.
Count me in, I'll go!
Stunning and beautiful.
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